Topic: Students working while studyingGeneral purpose: To argue
Specific purpose: To argue that students should not study while working
Thesis statement: Students should not study while working because 1) they will not have time to concentrate in their studies 2) they will engage in unruly activities 3) it causes students to drop out of school
Introduction
I) [Attention Getter] The statements below given by the US department of education were published in Sheena’s book, Studying Strategies.
‘It is estimated that there are more than five million teenagers who are working in the United States as of today.’ (‘) Most teenage students are trying their best to find jobs while they are schooling.” (Sheena 282-283).
The salary they receive might make them engage in unruly activities because they are not responsible and they do not know how to handle money.’ (Sheena 269-270).
II) [Topic justification/ Establish controversy] In today’s world, most teenage students, all over the world engage in various part time jobs, mostly in developed countries.
Students who work while in school are likely to drop out of school because of the stress associated with multi-tasking their school work with job activities (Clifford & Nigel, 2012).
Many students who work while studying experience difficulties in their academic works. A research conducted by the National Council showed that those students who spend over 20 hours a week working while studying are likely to get poor grades. (Michael, 2014).
I totally agree with the National Council findings that students should not work while studying.
III) [Credibility statement] I have a strong interest in education
I have spent a lot of time researching on both sides of students working debate.
I was privileged to attend a seminar where educational stakeholders debated on the students working issue
IV) [Preview] the education department should prohibit working while studying in the US for three reasons
First, students who engage in jobs are less likely to do less homework and have very little time to concentrate on their studies.
Second, working while at school can make a student drop out of school.
Finally, working while in school can make a student have bad habits.
Transition: let’s begin with factors that have an immense impact when one works while studying: working while schooling is not good because it adversely affects one’s education.
Body
1.[ First constructive argument] First, students who engage in jobs are less likely to do less homework and have very little time to concentrate on their studies
A. working while schooling was originally designed to assist student gain experience before the get into the job market, but the unintended consequence is that it has adversely affected student’s education
1. A research carried out by the institute of Medicine also found out that students who spent more than 20 hours a week working get poor grades (Sheena, 2000).
2. This is largely due to the fact that students arrive home late and tired and hence they cannot handle their homework (Sheena, 2000).
3. Students who spent more than 20 hours a week working get poor grades (Sheena, 2000).
B. On top, working while schooling can make a student drop out of school.
1) Findings of research by University of Minnesota and Stanford University found out that students who work while studying are likely to drop out of school. Moreover, students who work while in school are likely to drop out of school because of the stress associated with multi-tasking their school work with job activities (Michael, 2014).
2) A research carried out by the Temple University found out that students who work are likely to engage in alcoholism that will make such students skive classes and work so that they can earn an extra coin for their leisure activities. This might also lead to addiction which is an added problem. Addiction will lead such students to engage in other activities such as pre-mature sex which will result to early and unwanted pregnancies. Such students are also likely to acquire sexually transmitted infections such as HIV/AIDS (Michael, 2014)
C. Many students do not realize that working while studying is unfavorable because they get extra cash besides the pocket money that they receive from their parents and guardians (Michael, 2014).
Transition: Now that we comprehend exactly how working while studying affects one’s education, we will look at its implications in the society and disadvantages.
II) [Second constructive argument] Second, working as a student affects the education.
Working while studying affects the education system in the United States.
The Education Department of the US has tried to abolish working while studying and made laws to curb this situation ( Clifford & Nigel 2012)
By disrespecting the wishes of the Education Department of the US we undermine its authority (Clifford & Nigel 2012).
A report issued by the National Council claims that working affects education negatively.
The National council report makes it clear that studying while working is illegal and be abolished by all means.
Transition: Even though it is vivid that working while studying is unfavorable, some critics argue that it is counterproductive. My next argument will show that working is actually counterproductive.
III. [Refutation] finally, working while school is not productive
[Minimization] Working while schooling has more cons than pros.
Such students are likely to value money more than their academic work.
A research carried out by the institute of Medicine also found out that students who spent more than 20 hours a week working have high rates of alcohol consumption (Sheena, 2000).
[Turn the table] Furthermore, working will lead such students to engage in other activities such as pre-mature sex which will result to early and unwanted pregnancies.
Students are also likely to acquire sexually transmitted infections such as HIV/AIDS (Michael, 2014).
Students who have been affected by such diseases may drop out of school due to stigmatization.
[Impact statements] Working while schooling not only affects education but also the society at large.
Transition: Although working while in school is beneficial, it has many disadvantages.
Conclusion
In summary, let’s look at why the government should abolish student working programs in the US.
A. First, students who engage in jobs are less likely to do less homework and have very little time to concentrate on their studies.
B. Second, working while at school can make a student drop out of school.
C. Finally, working while in school can make a student have bad habits
It is high time the government curbs the student working program to promote education system and the society at large.
Enthymemes
Categorical Enthymeme
Major premise: working affects students negatively
Minor premise: Working affects studies
Conclusion: working affects studies negatively
Tests:
1-yes, only three terms appear, they are in the right place.
-major term: Studies
-minor term: Working
2-yes each term is used twice.
3-yes, the middle term is applied universally
4-yes the middle term is used again in the minor premise
5-yes, at least one of the premises is affirmative
6-both terms are affirmative therefore the conclusion is negative
Hypothetical Enthymeme
Major Premise: if engage in work studies program, you affect you education
Minor Premise: work studies work program affects education
Conclusion: work studies program undermines education
Tests
1-yes, the two conclusions are casually related, work program is an underlying component of education
2- The minor premises affirms the antecedent
3- Yes, a logical conclusion is made because the minor premise corresponds with the antecedent.
- Clifford, K & Nigel, F. Multitasking while Studying: Divided attention (2012). New York, NY: Oxford University press
- Michael, P. Study Skills: How to Manage your Time (2014). Boston; Cengage Learning
- Sheena, G. Studying Strategies: How to Effectively Balance Studies and Work (2000). Cambridge: Harvard University Press.
